A friend has written to you asking for some advice about a problem with work. you have had a problem like this before. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter; - show that you understand the problem - explain how your situation was similer - suggest a solution to your friend's problem

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Dear Ron, I assume
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letter finds you in a pink of health. Pulling up your letter
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morning, I realize that you are in
a tough work situations
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tough work situations
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of unreal comments for your annual appraisal. Two years back,
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I was working with ABC incorporations, I faced
similar
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challenge and I reckon how you might be feeling. In my situation, my boss requested
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put in more hours
of
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apply
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my job ensuring the project deadlines
are
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not crossed.
Inspite
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In spite
of me burning the midnight oil to
handover
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my
stuffs
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stuff
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, unfair remarks
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has
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not
putting
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in
cent
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percent
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for the team put me off. I was absolutely
discontended
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discontented
to
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happening. If I were you, I would have documented all the bonus tasks and extra time invested towards my professional duties and
share
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to on
weekly
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basis
to
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my manager.
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is how
,
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I could have created some
evidences
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evidence
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to fight my battles for yearly feedback
meeting
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and be in winning
circumtances
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circumstances
. I think
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would help you, and don't be disheartened
with
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this
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concern;everyone comes across
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incidents in their work environment.
Let'
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catch up soon for meals, it's been a
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! Best Regards, XYZ
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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking down some of the longer sentences to improve readability and ensure clarity of ideas.
task achievement
While the letter addresses the task effectively, you can enhance it by providing more specific suggestions or examples related to dealing with work appraisal issues.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains an empathetic and understanding tone throughout, which is appropriate for writing to a friend.
complete response
The letter successfully includes a personal anecdote to relate to the friend's situation, which is effective in building connection and understanding.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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