Some peole tend ti take temporary jobs (they only work for few month of year), for they have time to do other things. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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People

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have different

temperament

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temperaments

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towards life.some of them prefer working part-time over others. I believe it has some advantages but they are temporary and in

long-term

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the long-term

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, It has more disadvantages.

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with ,one of the prime merits is

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that such

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people

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can take a break from work anytime.they can travel around anytime

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in order to go on vacations or short trips, they do not have to wait for the annual leave.

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, they enjoy their lives more than

people

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in fixed employment.

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, they have plenty of time to do other tasks around the household. They are more available to look after their Families.

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taking care of a sick family member. Apart from that ,

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people

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can pursue their hobbies easily like painting ,singing ,fitness training reading and so on

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not working

permanent

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job is not ideal realistically. The main issue is related to the low income. They make less money

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they are not in a very good situation financially .

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, in most companies,these employees are not entitled to

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pension ,which gives Stability in their older age ,

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, it is scary because in advanced age it's very hard to earn and

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without getting a fixed amount of pension ,it is hard to survive .

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most of the firms gives extra bonuses , promotions and other benefits to only to the staff members in

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job .

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, free health services and transport which they wouldn't have qualified

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, I believe temporary employment brings

short time

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short-term

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benefits like recreational trips and more time for friends and family

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it's

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cause

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causes

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more serious trouble

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not only in terms of less salary but

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not being awarded a pension and other

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benefits

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Some peole tend ti take temporary jobs (they only work for few month of year), for they have time to do other things. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Today, many people use the internet and smartphones to transfer money to friends, family, and businesses. Is this a positive or negative development?

In the developed world avarage life expectancy is increasing in modern life. Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of aging-population. What problem will this causefor individuals and society.

A faction of people holds the notion that juveniles should be independent from their parents, others argue that they must be supervised and controlled by their parents. This essay will delve into both viewpoints and express my support for the latter view with relevant illustrations

Many people say the gap between rich and poor people is wider, as rich people become richer and poor people grow poorer. What problems could this situation cause and what measure can be done to address those problems?

Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination while others think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Discuss both views and give your opinion