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The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The graph illustrates the
prcentage
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percentage
 of British citizens watching TV or listening to the
radio
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 during 24 hours in 1992.
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, the number of TV-lovers was slightly higher than those preferring
radio
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.
It is clear that
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 television was mostly
wartched
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watched
 in the evening,
while
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radio
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 was most frequently listened to in the morning. Focusing first on the first half of the day, from 1.00 to 5.00, nearly 5% of
British
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the British
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 population were either watching TV or listening to the
radio
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. After that, the proportion of the
radio
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audience
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 increased sharply, with above 25% of listeners between 7.00 and 9.00, which was followed by
its
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 decline
by
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of
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 nearly 10% by 13.00, when its level was exactly the same as the proportion of the television
audience
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. As for the remaining part of the day, television gained
most
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the most
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 popularity during
this
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 period,
skyrocketed
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in
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to
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 21.00, reaching more than 45% of British dedicated their time to
this
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 activity, as opposed to the number of those listening to the
radio
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, with nearly 5% of its
audience
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. After 21.00, the percentage of
TV-viewers
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TV viewers
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 decreased significantly to nearly 15% by the end of the day,
whereas
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 for the
radio
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audience
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, the corresponding figure remained untouched.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words radio, audience with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
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