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Some people believe that studying literature is important for individual character building while oahers think it is o waste of time. Discuss both point of view and provide Your own opinion.

#people #literature #character #oahers #waste #time #point
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study
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literature
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 is a contentious issue debate,
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 some
people
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 think that
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 a crucial for individual development.
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, others say
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it's
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waste
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a waste
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 of
time
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.
this
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essue
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issue
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 will examine some key
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points of both 2 different views and outline my view.
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 with,
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study
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literature
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 is quite important to understand a particular thing, collecting all information through textual analysis can
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be used
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 as a method to build
individuals
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individual
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 growth.
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, knowing human psychology can help
people
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 to be
a
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human
being
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beings
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, acting based on human
principle
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principles
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 or human
emotion
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emotions
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 not solely
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 without
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manners
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.
However
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,
on the other hand
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,
people
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 think that critical reading
its
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is
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 not that significant to individual character,
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in
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the
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other words it
will
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is
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waste
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a waste
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 of
time
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.
This
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 view could be because
people
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 prefer
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 practically rather than the
teoritical
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theoretical
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doing
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 some research
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requires
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 a lot of
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 and patience.
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,
people
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 who want to know how to make
money
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 shortly prefer to think
fast
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 and do actions like
build
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building
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 a business or trade
instead
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 of
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study
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studying
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 for a long
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 to know how
money
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 works, Whose
people
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 behind the first
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, why
money
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 can be a transactions tools and others.
To sum up
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,
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literature
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the literature
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 review
is playing
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plays
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 a crucial role
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in understanding
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 how things work. I personally believe that it will help
people
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 to have insight and can build their development growth. As many
high value
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high-value
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people
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 out there really know what they say and act based on their knowledge through
study
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literature
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.
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task achievement
Improve the clarity and depth of examples. For instance, delve more into how literature impacts human relationships or decision-making skills rather than giving vague examples.
coherence cohesion
Make sure all your ideas and points are logically connected. Use clearer linking phrases to enhance the flow between ideas.
task achievement
The essay provides both views on the importance of studying literature, fulfilling the task requirement.
coherence cohesion
The essay concludes with a personal opinion, incorporating elements of conclusion and opinion, which strengthens the overall argument.

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