It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? - - You should spend around 40 minutes on this task.

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as university is a contentious issue debate nowadays, as many students prefer
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from senior high
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will examine some key points about
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and drawbacks of
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issue. On the one hand, having a gap
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some benefits for students.
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it is undeniable that
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is a boring activity for some people, continuing study without a break
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quite challenging so
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students
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need
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to re-charge energy and prepare
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for a
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, a student
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to take a break for a
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about
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life and how
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works with
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what the best major to take for
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, no need to hurry to take university
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but lack of information,
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misleading information could may
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to wrong career stage.
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, people may argue that
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a rest for
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negativity
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as
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brain. a gap
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for some people
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to not critical
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thinking
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because
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the human
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to practice especially in
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field. For
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instance
, someone who
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a rest of
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before
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their
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and
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some money during that
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to laziness
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school
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later.
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, taking
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time
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between finishing
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and going to university obviously brings both benefits and drawbacks.
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energy and
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some
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preparation
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. Meanwhile, undoubtedly it can bring disadvantages
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for those who make some income, leading to
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an unfocus
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on their study.
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