Many supermarkets sell more and more imported food products than ones produced in their home country. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?
It is pretty obvious that in almost each and every market we can see foreign
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product
as compared to the local stuff. Every person wants Fix the agreement mistake
products
that
kind of things that are made Correct determiner usage
the
in
abroad because of Change preposition
apply
this
sellers keeps more imported Linking Words
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product
rather than Fix the agreement mistake
products
the
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apply
local
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locally
made
produce. It has some pros and cons as well. Verb problem
produced
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will discuss both in Change the capitalization
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this
paragraph.
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the
developing countries selling more foreign Correct article usage
apply
made
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apply
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product
is Fix the agreement mistake
products
much
popular nowadays. it has Rephrase
very
lot
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a lot
benefits
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of benefits
to
both nations. Change preposition
for
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first
country who is exporting that Change the article
the first
nation
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get
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gets
foreign
currency that helps that Add an article
a foreign
the foreign
nation
to boost Use synonyms
their
economy. Correct pronoun usage
its
On the other hand
, the store owner gets more money on imported made things, because lots of Linking Words
persons
think that imported Replace the word
people
products
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always
much better and that Add a missing verb
are always
consumers
always ready to pay more. Add a verb
consumers are
consumers were
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person
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a person
the person
then
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abroad made
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abroad-made
products
can make Use synonyms
better
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a better
impact
on others.
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by
selling more imported Change preposition
apply
products
has some negative outcomes. Use synonyms
Initially
, when any country imports the Linking Words
products
from Use synonyms
other
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another
nation
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then
it Linking Words
decrease
the GDP of Change the verb form
decreases
importing
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the importing
nation
because when the cash flow of any authority goes outside the Use synonyms
nation
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then
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make
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makes
bad
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a bad
impact
on reducing GDP. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, Linking Words
due to
the Linking Words
foreign made
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foreign-made
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product
local Fix the agreement mistake
products
manufacture
things are losing popularity and lots of native Replace the word
manufacturing
craftsman
are losing jobs and they have less source of money. It impacts Change to a plural noun
craftsmen
on
the financial Change preposition
apply
impact
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on
native Change preposition
of
craftsman`s
.
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craftsman
To conclude
, Linking Words
every thing
has positive Correct your spelling
everything
outcome
as well Fix the agreement mistake
outcomes
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as negative
negative
. But Correct pronoun usage
negative ones
by
importing more Change preposition
apply
products
can make Use synonyms
negative
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a negative
impact
on importing Use synonyms
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nation
and it helps other countries to boost their economies. Fix the agreement mistake
nations
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Also
it has Add a comma
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more
negative Add an article
a more
impact
on the local Use synonyms
workers
financial conditions.Change noun form
workers'
worker's
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