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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The graph illustrates how much carbon dioxide
emissions
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 per person in four different countries (United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal) in 5 years from 1967 to 2007.
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, the highest CO2 emission in the UK all over the year,
while
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 the lowest metric
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 in Portugal between 1967 and 2007. The proportion of carbon dioxide in the UK started at around 10
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 in 1967 and decreased to around 9 in 2007.
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, the number of
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 in Sweden increased from 9
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 to more than 10
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 between 1967 and 1977 but it started decreasing to less than 6
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 in 2007.
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, the average CO2
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 in Italy increased in five years from around 4
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 in 1967 to less than 8
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 in 2007.
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, the number of CO2
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 rose from around 1 metric to 4
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 and
reach
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 the lowest
of
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apply
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average
avarage
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average
emissions
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at the end
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 of year
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, metrics with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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