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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing house work in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing house work in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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The first
line
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graph
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 illustrates the proportion of families that use electrical appliances
such
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 as washing
machines
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, refrigerators,and
vacuum
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 cleaners from 1920 up until 2019.The other
line
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graph
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 shows the time per household spent each
week
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 on house chores in the same time
period
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.
Overall
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,the usage of all three electrical appliances experienced an upward trend throughout the
period
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.The refrigerator and
vacuum
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 cleaner ended up having the same percentage
at the end
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 of 2019, making them the most widely used electrical appliances by households.
While
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 washing
machines
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 had a smaller proportion,compared to them.
On the other hand
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, the
line
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graph
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 illustrating the
hours
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 spent on housework per
week
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 experienced a downward trend throughout the time
period
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. In 1920, 5 per cent of households were using a refrigerator making it the least electrical appliance used,
while
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 a washing machine was the most used (40%),and a
vacuum
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 cleaner was only 30%.
However
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, in 1960
vacuum
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 cleaners exceeded washing
machines
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,as it increased strikingly reaching 100% in 2019.
While
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 washing
machines
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 declined to 65% in 1950;yet, it managed to increase reaching 75% in 2019.
On the other hand
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 grew significantly throughout the
period
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,as it reached 100% in 1960 and remained stable until 2019.
In contrast
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, the
line
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graph
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 showing the number of
hours
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 spent by households on house chores had a downward trend throughout the
period
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.Where the number of
hours
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 experienced a decline of 30
hours
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;from 50
hours
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 per
week
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 in 1920 to 20
hours
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 in 1960.
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,from 1980 to 2000 it had a stable amount of
hours
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 spent which was 15
hours
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 per
week
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.
However
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, it experienced a slight decline reaching 10
hours
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 per
week
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 in 2019.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, on the other hand, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words line, graph, machines, vacuum, week, period, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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