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More and more tasks we do at home and at work these days are done by robots. Is this a positive or negative development? Trung

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In the modern era, technology is more and more developing to help improve people's lives. Especially, artificial intelligence replaces
humans
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 in some jobs.
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 some restrictions need to be addressed, I think
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 development is mostly beneficial. There are many benefits to using
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 in life.
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, people will have more time to spend on other aspects of life because
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 will help you do housework.
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, my parents no longer have to spend time cooking and cleaning, so they can focus on careers.
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,
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 complete repetitive tasks quicker and more accurately, incorporating
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 into the workforce will result in higher productivity.
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, technology will help that country become richer by producing goods faster.
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, clothing, cooked, or technological devices will be available to
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 at a cheaper cost.
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, the use of
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 will bring serious consequences.
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 increase the unemployment rate because it more exactly to
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.
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, with production automation, many factories will prioritize the use of automatic technology. Another consequence is that the dependency on
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 will cause a lack of survival skills.
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, if
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 do all the chores for people, future generations will lack necessary skills like cooking, doing laundry, or cleaning houses.
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 lack of skills means
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 in the future will be dependent on
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. In conclusion,
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 I have to admit that heavy dependence on
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 has certain serious implications, moderate use of
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 to help with chores and repetitive tasks at work faster.
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 is a positive development.
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