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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates a survey result how
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
residents
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residents'
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habits
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 of buying and drinking
coffee
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 and
tea
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 in five Australian
cities
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.
Overall
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, Australian
people
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 except Adelaide residents who went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in the
last
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 four weeks experienced much higher than the other two
habits
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.
On the other hand
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, those
people
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 who bought fresh
coffee
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 during the same period stood lower in all the Australian
cities
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. In Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart
cities
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, the percentage of
people
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 who went to a cafe to consume
coffee
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 and
tea
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 was
above all
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 other
cities
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 and
also
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 other
habits
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 and stood at between 60% and just under 85% in the
last
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 four weeks. It is
also
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 worth mentioning that the lowest
habits
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 of consumption of
coffee
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 and
tea
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 in the case of just "bought fresh" in Brisbane and Adelaide
cities
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 stood at nearly under 35%. In terms of
people
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 who bought instant
coffee
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 in the
last
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 four weeks
in
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all five city dwellers stood at between just above 45% and just under 55%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words habits, coffee, tea, cities, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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