Some people think that the detailed criminal description on newspaper and TV has bad influences, so this kind of infornation should be restricted on the media. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying the fact that criminal documentaries attract the audience’s attention.
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it is a commonly held belief that the detailed description of
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crime
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story
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stories
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in newspapers and TV has bad influences,
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, these documentaries should be restricted in the media, there is
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an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, publishing these kinds of
news
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is not beneficial for our community and it should be regulated by the government.
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with,
crime
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stories in general, contain the criminal story and the storyline of the
crime
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.
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, a detailed explanation of the
crime
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including the
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tools will be published to the public via social media and
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television's
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channels.
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,
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companies will fight each other to tackle the situation in order to publish exclusive
news
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.
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, if a
crime
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was committed you will observe that all
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companies will do their diligence in order to catch some details about the incident. Another point to consider, there is
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chances
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that
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news
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may influence people to copy these acts which will
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a hazard to the community. It is
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possible to say that, in some
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the victims’ families may be bothered by all
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attention and it will not assist them in their recovery from the trauma that did happen to them.
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, broadcasting these adverse events will make
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society anxious.
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, people will feel hesitation when they are dealing with strangers. In conclusion, despite people having different points of view, I tend to believe that broadcasting criminal events must be banned from all media channels in order to protect our society.
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