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Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers, while others believe that students’ attitudes are important. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #success #teachers #students’ #attitudes
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Some individuals agree that good
teachers
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significant
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 educational
success
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,
others
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 agree that students' attitudes are most important. In
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 will discuss both sides and give my own opinions. Starting with
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 that good
teachers
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 are important to
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achieve
 educational
success
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. Good
teachers
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 possess the skills to inspire and engage students, thereby directly influencing their academic
success
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. They can tailor their teaching methods to meet the needs of individual learners, provide insightful feedback, and create a
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 learning environment. Moving onto
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another perspective
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a
student
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's attitude is critical because a
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motivated
student
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 is more likely to work hard, seek help when needed, and be resilient in the face of challenges. Their personal drive can lead to
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 regardless of the quality of teaching
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 receive. A
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 view suggests that
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 good
teachers
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 lay the foundation through effective teaching and support, a
students's
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 positive attitude allows them to take full advantage of these opportunities, leading to educational
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. In conclusion, both views have their
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merits
. In my opinion ,it is the synergy between competent
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 and motivated
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students
 that ultimately ensures educational
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Teachers
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 can ignite a
student
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's interest, but it is the
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's attitude that sustains their effort and progress.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational success
  • good teachers
  • students’ attitudes
  • academic achievement
  • teaching methods
  • learning environment
  • motivation
  • personal drive
  • resilient
  • foundation
  • effective teaching
  • synergy
  • ignite interest
  • sustain effort
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