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Band 5

Some think that parents reading books for entertainment to their children is a waste of time and they should only read them serious educational books. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people
believes
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 that
parents
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 should be reading educational
books
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 for their
children
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 rather than entertainment
books
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 because it won't bring great benefits for their
children
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. In my opinion, reading
academical
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books
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 will be beneficial for
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children
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children's
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 school
lifes
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lives
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, but
i
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 don't think that reading
entertainment
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an entertainment
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book
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books
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 is
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waste
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a waste
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 of time because
there's
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 so many benefits from it.
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 essay will explain the disagreement of the statements using examples to support arguments and demonstrate the points.
Parents
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reads
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entertaing
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entertaining
books
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for
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 their
children
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, especially for
todler
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toddlers
, can
inderectly
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indirectly
improving
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 their linguistic skills by hearing their
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parents
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parent's
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 voice.
For example
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,
Parents
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 read a
book
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 about a light novel
for
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 their
children
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 and they will
heard
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a
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apply
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new words,
then
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 they
trying
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 to ask their
parents
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 about the meaning. By that process,
children
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 will gain more
knowledege
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knowledge
 about new
vocabularies
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vocabulary
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 and how to
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 them. Creativity can
boost
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be boosted
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up
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by listening to a
book
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 that can be enjoyed by
children
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such
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 as novels or fairytales. To illustrate,
children
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in age
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aged
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 around 3-9 years old still
loves
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 to
make imagination
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, They will try imagining the story whenever they
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 the
books
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. In my opinion, Imagination is a key factor
to
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 improving creativity skills, so it will bring great
advantageous
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 if
parents
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reads
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read
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 a fun
book
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for
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 their
children
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. In summary, even
thought
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though
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 reading
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book
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books
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such
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 as
novel
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novels
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 or
fairytale
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fairytales
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 will not
give
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have
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 huge effects
for
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on
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children
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children's
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aducation
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education
 life,
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this kind
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 of
books
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 still bring great benefits for them like extand their vocabulary collection and
honed
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honing
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 their creativity skills.
Parents
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 should be balancing
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this
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both factors because
children
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also
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 need fun
activites
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activities
 rather than listening to
a heavy academic
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heavy academic books
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books
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. Who
know
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knows
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you
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your
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children
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 can improve their academic
skill
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skills
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 through
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this kind
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these kinds
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 of activities.

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Task Response
Ensure your ideas are clearly expressed and not repetitive. Avoid introducing ideas without thorough explanations. Try to integrate examples more seamlessly into your argumentation.
Coherence and Cohesion
Develop the logical flow of ideas. Make sure all points tie back to the central argument. Use transitional phrases to improve fluidity between paragraphs.
Task Response
The essay presents a clear stance that discusses both sides of the argument and supports the writer's disagreement with the statement.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction sets the context and provides a clear thesis statement, and the conclusion effectively summarizes the main points.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enhance creativity
  • foster a love for reading
  • gateway to more serious reading
  • parent-child bond
  • emotional and psychological development
  • moral lessons and values
  • diverse cultures
  • engaging and enjoyable
  • problem-solving
  • innovative thinking
  • disengagement
  • overall learning experience
  • serious educational content
  • storytelling and literature
  • reading with children
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