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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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The table and pie charts below illustrate the police budget in one area of Britain in
both
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 the source and allocation of funds, in the
years
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 2017 and 2018.
Overall
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, The table reveals three primary sources of police funding: national government, local taxes, and other sources,in
millions
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 pounds. The pie charts display the distribution of the police budget across three categories
such
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 as salaries, technology, and infrastructure, providing percentages for each.
Firstly
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,the table shows the highest fund source was from the government in
both
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years
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, at 175.5
million
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 and 177.8
million
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, respectively.The local taxes increased the most from 91.2
million
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 to 102.3
million
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, 12
pe rcent
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per cent
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, approximately. The lowest salary was from others in
both
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 2017 and 2018 but it added up a little from 38
million
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 to 38.5
million
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.
Secondly
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,
both
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 pie charts show the highest percentage that they paid for in
both
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years
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 was earning even though it decreased a little bit from 75
percent
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per cent
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 to 69
percent
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per cent
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, orderly. For technology expenses, they were equal at 17% in
both
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years
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. The lowest allocation in
both
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years
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 was infrastructure, going up by 6% in 2018.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words both, years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget
  • funding sources
  • national government
  • local taxes
  • distribution
  • allocation
  • salaries
  • technology
  • infrastructure
  • workforce expenses
  • modernization
  • investment
  • fluctuation
  • financial planning
  • policy direction
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