The chart below give information about levels of education in Glasgow, a city in Scotland, in 2010

The chart below give information about levels of education in Glasgow, a city in Scotland, in 2010
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The bar chart depicts educational stages by various ages in Glasgow, situated in Scotland, during 2010,
whereas
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the pie chart illustrates education ranks for gender in any
age
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groups
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for Glasgow in Scotland, in 2010.
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, education ranks,
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by
ages
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age
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had the most for
university
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a university
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degree
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degrees
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, with no qualifications had the least.
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level
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the level
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of education for school certificates had the most for both
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genders
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,
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no qualifications got the same amount With regards to the university degree which accounted for the most
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learners especially younger
age
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at roughly 71%-76%, with older
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between 25% and 50%. In terms of school
certificate
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, approximately 15% to 20% of
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groups
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from 16 to 75 had
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level
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, six times more than the 75+ group.
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, the final
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for youngsters
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relatively the same at exactly 9% with 50-75 and 75+
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groups
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consisted
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of 30% and 72%, respectively. Turning to the remaining statistics where school certificate rank made up the most for both
gender
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(around 38%). As for university
degree
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degrees
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, both sexes had the same proportion of 33%. Meanwhile, no qualifications rank ranged from 29%-32% for men and women.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups, level with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage distribution
  • educational levels
  • qualifications
  • higher education
  • school level qualifications
  • no qualifications
  • proportions
  • notable trends
  • outliers
  • age demographics
  • economic conditions
  • social policies
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