The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first pie chart displays the average energy use at homes in Australia.
However
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, the other pie chart illustrates the
amount
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of carbon
emissions
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from Australian households.
Overall
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, there are seven categories of energy use in Australian households, the most energies consumed are heating and
water
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heating,
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water
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heating and other appliances have the highest rates of greenhouse gas
emissions
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.
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, Australian households use a large
amount
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of power on heating which is 42% , and in second place
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using electricity is for
water
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heating and other appliances with 30% and 15% respectively.
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, the consumption of power on refrigeration, lighting, and cooling is relatively the same at 7%,4%, and 2% respectively.
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, the carbon
emissions
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of
water
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heating and other devices have the highest rates of toxic gases nearly 32% and 28%. The greenhouse gases from refrigeration and heating have the same
amount
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of carbon
emissions
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14% and 15% respectively. The percentage of lightning and cooling have a tiny
amount
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of gases with 8 per cent and 3 per cent.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, emissions, water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average Australian household
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Energy consumption
  • Activities
  • Heating
  • Cooling
  • Water heating
  • Appliances
  • Lighting
  • Standby
  • Percentage (%)
  • Consumption patterns
  • Efficiency
  • Emissions impact
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy-saving measures
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Electricity
  • Natural gas
  • Emissions breakdown
  • Energy audit
  • Environmental impact
  • Conservation
  • Mitigation strategies
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