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As languages such as English, Spanish and Mandarin become more widely spoken, there is a concern that many minority languages may disappear. Some countries have taken steps to protect minority languages. What is your view of this practice?

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Nowadays, some
languages
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 as English, Spanish, and Mandarin, are becoming more widely spoken.
As a result
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, a significant consequence which will
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 is the disappearance of many minority
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. In my view, both governments and communities should take action to address
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 issue.
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 with, I believe that the existence of various spoken
languages
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 is extensively appealing.
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, having just a few
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 in the world has not any attraction to me.
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, the indigenous
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 demonstrate the history and the cultural background of a nation.
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, in my country, Persian as an ancient language, illustrates the rich culture of my nation making it much special.
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, to some extent, preserving native
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 is essential for the culture of an ancient country.
On the other hand
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, some argue that
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 of
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languages
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 is necessary for international communications in business, research, and policy.
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, some implications inevitably come into existence.
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, English is the current international communication way,
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 we can see its influence on all countries.
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, authorities should constantly replace the new English words with their equivalent native ones. In conclusion, I am firmly in
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 of maintaining the original
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. In fact, it is a crucial task for every country to save their mother tongue.
This
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 role should be done by a collaboration between governments and people, especially parents, to raise their new generation in a way that children understand the importance of
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 issue.
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coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion were effectively presented, clearly framing the essay and summarizing your perspective.
task achievement
The essay comprehensively addresses the prompt with a complete response, covering both the importance of preserving minority languages and perspectives on international languages.

Word Count

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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