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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation,such as an unsatisfactory jib or shortage of money.Others argue that it is better to try and imprive such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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set-back
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setback
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delimma
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dilemma
 occurs each day, what
differentiate
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is
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 how we react to
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 crisis, some may feel that the preferred outcome is to live with it,
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 there is an argument that improving it to a finer fact is essential. In
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essay
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i
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 will discuss both points of view, and
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end
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 I will drop in my personal perspective. On one side of the coin, several situations in modern
life
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 require implementing it deeply
in
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, to clarify,
accept
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and accept
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 the
delimma
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dilemma
 as it is for the main justification that you can not revise it and
its
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 beyond your control. To illustrate,
life
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 is a complex clock, you can not backtrack or move forward in time.
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, It is
widly
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widely
 proven in
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 Quran that God may have a plan for a
servent
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 if he prevents him/her from achieving what he/she
desire
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 the most,
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, the heartbroken individual must embrace it. On the other side of the coin, some may believe that it is
beneficial
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 and crucial idea to strive and improve the circumstances, and
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 given statement is based on different factors.
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, it implements
self satisfaction
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 that he did whatever it took to alter the situation .To give an example, if a person failed an entry exam for a dream career, he could try again and again.
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, it can enhance patience and confidence,
as well as
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, acceptance in an individual personality, to give an example, waiting for
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a committe
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committe
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committee
 decision and living a delightful poor
life
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.
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, it is essential for a person to try and develop new ideas to succeed in his/her
life
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 in the future and not
bieng
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be
 defeated.
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Improvement
Provide clearer examples to support your main points. For instance, offer real-life examples or statistics if possible.
Improvement
Ensure spelling and grammatical accuracy, especially words like "delimma" (dilemma), "widly" (widely), "bieng" (being), "committe" (committee), "servent" (servant), etc.
Improvement
Explain some ideas more thoroughly, particularly the complex ones such as religious or philosophical viewpoints.
Strength
The essay displays a clear understanding of both perspectives regarding the topic.
Strength
You have included an introduction and conclusion, framing your essay well.
Strength
The essay is well-organized overall, maintaining a logical structure throughout.
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