Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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creates
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create
victim
. Fix the agreement mistake
victims
However
, there are some Linking Words
people
who are Use synonyms
perennial
nuisance to the society. Add an article
a perennial
Such
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people
deserve Use synonyms
long term
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long-term
jails
. Fix the agreement mistake
jail
While
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,
other says that it could Remove the comma
apply
be reduce
to using alternate ways of Change the verb form
be reduced
punishment
. I agree with the formal view because it's a proper Use synonyms
punishment
for them. I have elaborated my opinion in the below paragraphs.
On the one hand,for some criminals, a Use synonyms
long term
jail is justification. Add a hyphen
long-term
Firstly
, there are a number of Linking Words
people
who Use synonyms
committed
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commit
Use synonyms
crime
in every situation. It is more common in every place. Authority should some strict rules Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
again
them. Correct your spelling
against
Likewise
, Linking Words
them
provided Change the pronoun
they
cell
in Fix the agreement mistake
cells
lifetime
. It is Add an article
a lifetime
according to
their victim because if Linking Words
government
do not take strict rules again them Add an article
the government
crime
Use synonyms
is increase
day by dayWrong verb form
increases
high
. Correct word choice
apply
In addition
, Linking Words
criminal
do not afraid anyone . Fix the agreement mistake
criminals
Thus
,authority must take action Linking Words
again
them. Correct your spelling
against
As well as
give them Linking Words
lifespan
prison. It is Correct article usage
a lifespan
a
most sufficient Correct article usage
apply
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for them
them
who Correct pronoun usage
those
are
not feel safe Verb problem
do
in
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at
this
time.
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Secondly
, numerous Linking Words
people
who are committed murder or rape. Use synonyms
Otherwise
, they are not afraid Linking Words
to
the government. It is Change preposition
of
a
necessary to give them strict Change the article
apply
punishment
Use synonyms
along with
longer prison. Linking Words
For instance
, the accused of Linking Words
Delhi
gang rape case was executed which Correct article usage
the Delhi
justification
the victim Replace the word
justified
damini
.
Change the capitalization
Damini
In contrast
,some Linking Words
individual
believe that to decline Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
crime
through using different methods of Use synonyms
punish
. It is good for some small Replace the word
punishment
Use synonyms
crime
. Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
Such
as stolen. Linking Words
Also
,give Linking Words
punishment
to according their age,gender and circumstances under which Use synonyms
crime
is committed. Sometimes it is acceptable Use synonyms
due to
all are not committed murder or rape. They Linking Words
doing for
Wrong verb form
do
this
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owing
to Verb problem
apply
fulfill
their need Change the spelling
fulfil
such
as food,medical etc.
To arrive at an Linking Words
accept
conclusion,In my opinion, Replace the word
accepted
government
must Add an article
the government
take
strict rules Correct your spelling
make
them
along Change preposition
against them
strict
Change preposition
with strict
punishment
against them. Mention with try to give them lifetime cell. Use synonyms
Here by
,Correct your spelling
Hereby
that is
helpful to reduce Linking Words
crime
.Use synonyms
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