The graph gives information about the amount of time spent by mobile phone users in China on various media and forms of entertainment.

The graph gives information about the amount of time spent by mobile phone users in China on various media and forms of entertainment.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph gives information about the amount of time spent by mobile phone users in China on various media and forms of entertainment.
The graphics indicate the ways that mobile phone users in China used their devices for a range of uses other than making telephone calls, including gaming and accessing social networking sites. The two pie charts show the breakdown of hours spent on various activities, which experienced a sharp rise between 2016 and 2018. The proportions of
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spent on different tasks
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changed significantly. The amount of mobile screen
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went up from 2 hours to 3.2 hours per day for an average user, which represents a year-on-year increase of 22%. Using social networks remained the most common activity,
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its share fell from 60% of total screen
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in 2016 to just below half of all device use in 2018. The
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spent watching
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increased from 13% in 2016 to over one-fifth two years later. Accessing the news
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rose in popularity significantly during
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period. Two activities, reading and listening to audio, remained unchanged in terms of the proportion of phone users'
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, accounting
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both years for 3 and 4% respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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