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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United kingdown, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United kingdown, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the average emission of carbon dioxide per individual in four
countries
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 (United Kingdom,
Sweden
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, Italy,
Portugal
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and Portugal
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) over a
period
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 of 40 years. The data is calibrated in metric
tonnes
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. To give an overview, it is evident that the UK had the highest carbon dioxide emission values,
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 Portugal was significantly lower.
Sweden
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,
however
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, peaked in 1977 before reaching its lowest point in 2007.
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,
while
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two
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the two
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countries
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 showed significant growth over the
period
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, the other two showed a noticeable decline, indicating contrasting trends in the data. In 1967, Great Britain recorded the highest Carbon dioxide emissions at approximately 11 metric
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, followed by a modest decrease throughout the
period
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 before reaching nearly 9 metric
tonnes
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 in the end still being at the top among all other
countries
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.
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,
Sweden
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 started at almost 9 metric
tonnes
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 and increased slightly reaching its peak at just over 10 metric
tonnes
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 before experiencing a sharp fall in 1987 and hitting a low of almost 5 metric
tonnes
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in
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at
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 the end of the
period
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.
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, at the start of the
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, Italy and Portugal were at nearly 4 and 1 metric
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, respectively. Both of these
countries
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 showed a similar pattern of upward trend with Italy at nearly 8 metric
tonnes
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 and Portugal at the same level as
Sweden
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 in 2007.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, sweden, period, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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