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info about location and type of dances classes young people attend

#info #location #type #dances #classes #people
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The pie chart and table provide key information about the location of
dance
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classes
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 youths are attending in Australia
as well as
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 the type of
dance
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 they prefer.
Overall
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, it is clear from the chart that the majority of
dance
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classes
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 are in private studios.
In addition
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, children under eleven years old rather to enter ballet
classes
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whereas
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 teenagers prefer modern dances.
According to
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 what is shown, nearly half of
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dance
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the dance
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classes
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 are located in private studios,
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however
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 only 10% are situated in
collage-based
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 studios. Around a quarter of the available locations for
dance
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classes
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 are in school halls.
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, a fifth of the
dance
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seessions
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sessions
 are in community halls. In terms of the types of
dance
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classes
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, 300 teenagers are joining ballet
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 toddlers are doubled in ballet
classes
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. Around 520
student
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students
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 are engaging in modern
dance
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classes
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while
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 there are only 300 students attend
this
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 type of
dance
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. Approximately 430 of dancers are entering tap
classes
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however
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 roughly 400 of teenagers are dancing tap
dance
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.
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