The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The flow chart illustrates the
process
of altering the Use synonyms
sugar
cane plant to ready-to-use Use synonyms
sugar
.
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Overall
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it is clear that
there are seven stages in the whole Linking Words
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sugar
manufacturing. The Change preposition
of sugar
process
begins with the agricultural product fully growing and it ends with cooling and drying.
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The first step is
growing Linking Words
sugar
cane for one year to one and a half years. Use synonyms
Next,
for harvesting the production is done two ways, either harvesting manually or chopping down with harvested devices that Linking Words
there
are automatic. After that, the products are crushed and are changed to juice.
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Following
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this
, the prepared juice is poured into a limestone filter for the purifying liquid Linking Words
process
. Use synonyms
Then
, purified juice becomes syrup with Linking Words
special
machine which does the evaporating Add an article
a special
process
with heating. After that, Use synonyms
sugar
crystals and syrup are separated by centrifuge and Use synonyms
finally
, separated Linking Words
sugar
is dried and cooled, so as to use several industrial and household uses.Use synonyms
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