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Some countries have introduced laws to limit working hours for employees. Why are these laws introduced? Do you think they are a positive or negative development?

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There is no denying the fact that limiting the employees's working hours is an essential thing.
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 essay will discuss why some countries introduced these laws and if it is good or bad for development.
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 with, there are many advantages to limiting their hours of work.
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, they can spend more
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 with their families.
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, life is short so must appreciate the
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 we spend with the people we love and care about because we do not know when we are going to lose them.
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, the workers should have some
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 to care for themselves and rest because if they
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 too much it might impact their health .
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, there was a book that talked about how it is important to spend
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 with the ones we love but the guy who was in that story was working himself so he became unhealthy and weak long story short he died without even caring for his family the way that they needed. In terms of does it has a positive or negative impact on them , to be
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 might be good for some people but bad for others. It is
also
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 possible to say that, some workers want to have a big amount of money so they work for days without taking a rest just to reach their dreams so they are going to feel so bad for these rules
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 the others are going to be okay with it so we can not say if it is positive or negative unless we ask them ourselves. In conclusion , there are a lot of advantages
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 disadvantages and it does not affect the development .
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The essay introduces and concludes the topic effectively, giving it a full-circle progression which benefits reader understanding.
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You have highlighted important points about spending time with family and self-care, which are relevant to the topic.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Burnout
  • 2. Work-life balance
  • 3. Productivity
  • 4. Diminishing returns
  • 5. Ethical responsibility
  • 6. Exploitation
  • 7. Fair labor practices
  • 8. Chronic illnesses
  • 9. Job creation
  • 10. Unemployment rates
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