The map illustrates the changes in Stockford City in 1986 and present time. Summarize the key points and make comparison. Wite the essay in 150 words.

The map illustrates the changes in Stockford City in 1986 and present time. Summarize the key points and make comparison. Wite the essay in 150 words.
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The maps provide key information about
Stokeford
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the Stokeford
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plan, highlighting substantial development, with several features either transformed or constructed.
Overall
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, it is clear from the maps that Stokeford
have been
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has
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undergone
with
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apply
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a variety of improvements.
In addition
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, the
city
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in 1930
offers
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offered
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a variety of facilities,
whereas
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the current layout is strategically
desgined
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designed
with different facilities and services.
According to
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what is shown from the past map, the
city
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consist
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consists
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of a river, farmland and gardens. River Stoke is alongside the
city
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with a bridge
at the end
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of
area
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the area
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.
In
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On
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the right side there is a farmland with a variety of cows. The bridge is connected to a road in the
center
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centre
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of the
city
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where a number of houses are transformed
to
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into
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shops and a post office which are located
in
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on
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the left side of the road. Opposite
to
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apply
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the
road
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road,
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there is a primary school and a garden next to it. In terms of the current layout, all shops are demolished and replaced by houses,
while
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the post office
stayed
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stays
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in the same place. The number of houses has increased significantly
whereas
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the garden
is
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has been
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transformed
to
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into
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a retirement home.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • modernization
  • infrastructure
  • development
  • expansion
  • urbanization
  • replacement
  • redevelopment
  • renovation
  • gentrification
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