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The pie charts below show the reasons given for shopping online and in-store.

The pie charts below show the reasons given for shopping online and in-store.
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 of reasons for individuals to choose online shopping, the predominant part of sales was
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 saving time,
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 avoiding queues was lower than saving time reason with 3%. 24/7 shopping accounted for 21%, and avoiding queues was the lowest at 14%.
According to
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 what is shown, 40% of people chose to shop in-store because of the physical interaction, but the tiniest fraction of 8% saved the delivery time.
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, 17% of people chose the greater variety of shopping, leading us to end with 35% of people preferring to shop online, so they can talk to the salesperson.

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