The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The graph illustrates the
exports
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percentage of Australia to four different countries from 1990 to 2012.
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,
while
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Japan
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starts
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as the highest export partner for Australia, China overlapped
Japan
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in 2010 to
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the first in the
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period of the data with a consistent rise throughout the period.
Japan
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start
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as the highest for Australian exports with
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number
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of around 26% in 1990,
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it steadily decreased throughout the time. In 2010,
Japan
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's share was overtaken by China and sat
on
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the
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second place with 16% of
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in 2012. The United States's figure was more fluctuated than others, starting at around 11% in 1990, restoring its former share in 2000, and
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decline
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to 5% in 2010 before it slightly rose to around 6% in 2012. China became the most progressive country in terms of being the destination for Australian
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.
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it
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at relatively a low level at just 3% in 1990, the
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steadily increased to 5% in 2000 before it
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experienced a significant boom, making the share
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a staggering
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of approximately 28% in 2012.
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to the other nations in the data, India
persist
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to
became
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the lowest among all, starting with 3% of shares in 1990. India's
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then
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rise
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until 2010 and overtook the United
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position with a proportion of 7%, but
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it fell to 5% in 2012 and made it
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on
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fourth position again in the
last
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period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • percentages
  • exports
  • trend
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • fluctuations
  • stable
  • economic ties
  • demand
  • decline
  • recovery
  • policy changes
  • trade relationship
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • temporary surge
  • specific events
  • incentives
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