The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the process of making
bricks
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for construction purposes.
Overall
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, there are three main stages in the process, starting with digging up the
clay
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and ending with the production of packaged
bricks
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ready for delivery.
Initially
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, the process begins with
clay
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being dug from the ground using a digger. The
clay
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is
then
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transported to a roller, where it is broken down into smaller pieces. At
this
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stage, sand and water are added to the
clay
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to form a mixture. The
clay
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is shaped into
bricks
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in one of two ways: either by using a wire cutter or by moulding.
Next,
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the formed
bricks
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are dried in an oven for 24 to 48 hours.
Following
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this
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, the
bricks
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are placed in a kiln, where they undergo two stages of heating: moderate heating at temperatures between 200°C and 980°C Afterwards, the
bricks
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are cooled in a chamber for 48 to 72 hours.
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, the
bricks
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are packaged and prepared for delivery to construction sites.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks, clay with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacture
  • brick(s)
  • building industry
  • digging
  • extraction
  • raw material
  • clay
  • mixing
  • moulding
  • wire cutting
  • drying oven
  • firing
  • kiln
  • high temperatures
  • hardening
  • cooling
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • traditional
  • modern
  • environmental considerations
  • sustainability practices
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