The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the process of making
bricks
for construction purposes.Use synonyms
Overall
, there are three main stages in the process, starting with digging up the Linking Words
clay
and ending with the production of packaged Use synonyms
bricks
ready for delivery.
Use synonyms
Initially
, the process begins with Linking Words
clay
being dug from the ground using a digger. The Use synonyms
clay
is Use synonyms
then
transported to a roller, where it is broken down into smaller pieces. At Linking Words
this
stage, sand and water are added to the Linking Words
clay
to form a mixture. The Use synonyms
clay
is shaped into Use synonyms
bricks
in one of two ways: either by using a wire cutter or by moulding.
Use synonyms
Next,
the formed Linking Words
bricks
are dried in an oven for 24 to 48 hours. Use synonyms
Following
Linking Words
this
, the Linking Words
bricks
are placed in a kiln, where they undergo two stages of heating: moderate heating at temperatures between 200°C and 980°C Afterwards, the Use synonyms
bricks
are cooled in a chamber for 48 to 72 hours.Use synonyms
Finally
, the Linking Words
bricks
are packaged and prepared for delivery to construction sites.Use synonyms
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