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The process diagram details the steps by which liquid chocolate is produced from cocoa beans. Provide an overview of the information by identifying and describing the key details, and include comparisons where appropriate. (Minh Bùi)

The process diagram details the steps by which liquid chocolate is produced from cocoa beans. Provide an overview of the information by identifying and describing the key details, and include comparisons where appropriate. (Minh Bùi)
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The given diagram describes how to make
chocolate
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 from raw cocoa
beans
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, making
chocolate
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 is an artificial linear includes 10 steps which start with growing cocoa trees and end with liquid
chocolate
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 produced Looking at the diagram from a more detailed perspective, first of all, cacao trees are grown in tropical regions namely Indonesia,
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South America, and Africa. When the red pod ripen, the cocoa
beans
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 which are white are harvested by the farmer. In the next stage, the harvested
beans
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 are put in the leaves and fermented to achieve
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 special flavour.
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, the fermented
beans
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 are
spreaded
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 in sunlight to dry.
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, the dried
beans
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 are packed in large sacks and weighed before being transported by train or lorry to a factory and followed by being stored in the factory.
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, the stored
beans
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 are roasted at a high temperature of 350 Celsius degree.
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 but not least, the roasted
beans
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 are split into crushed
beans
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 and the counterpart which is taken away is the outer shell before the inner part of the
beans
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 which is pressed to produce liquid
chocolate
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chocolate, beans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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