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Nowadays, distance-learning programs have gained in popularity, but some people argue that online courses can never be taken as good as those taken at a college or university in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, a number of students opt to enrol in online courses, rather than going to college.
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 trend has sparked a debate among people that, it can never be as efficient as conventional methods of study.
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, I disagree with the latter notion and reasons to support my stance are elaborated in the following paragraphs.
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 with, people supporting the latter viewpoint assert that without a
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, it is difficult to concentrate on the studies. As a matter of fact,
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 university offers
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study friendly
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 environment, which is difficult to achieve at home.
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, pupils must attend college if they want to enrol in a study program.
On the other hand
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, those who favour the latter viewpoint opine that distance- learning enables an individual to learn in a more comfortable way. In fact,
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 readers find their peace of mind at their homes and feel comfortable and relaxed. Owing to
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, they can concentrate
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 course content in a better way.
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, online courses
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 students to learn in a comfortable environment.
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, E-courses are time-saving too, because in
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 mode pupils do not need to travel to and from the college. Indeed, it saves a lot of time, which generally was getting wasted in travelling in the past.
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, these
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 of learning methods save time too, which could be used for reading
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.
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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