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In some countries, companies allow people to work from home. In others, people are still expected to work in an office. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, we can easily see
people
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work
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 from
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, Some
people
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 still think we have to
work
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 in an office, and others think we can
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work
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 from our room. In
this
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 essay, I am going to see both views and I will give my opinion. From the perspective of
people
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 who want to
work
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 in their workplaces, they might think working in places that are not
home
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 will be much easier. From my experiences, studying at
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 was much more distracting than studying at school. There are too many things around you
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 as phones, laptops and your bed when you
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 or study in your room.
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, formal places don't have
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 things.
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, some
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 want to
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 in a comfortable mood.
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, you don't have to wake up early and take public transportation to go to your workplace.
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you can take a rest without worries when you are exhausted. Sometimes you have to take a moment when it's hard to finish your tasks and to make better results. In my opinion, my heart wants to stay at
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, but my brain says I have to
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at
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 controlled environments. Many of our jobs are likely requested by others and we need colleagues to make them better. Comfort zones? We
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 need them, but I think we need to distinguish when to rest and when to
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.
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task achievement
Consider adding more specific examples or anecdotes to strengthen the point about distractions at home and the role of formal work environments.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph elaborates on a key supporting idea with sufficient detail, to enhance clarity and strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly defines the topic and presents both sides of the argument, setting up the essay well.
task achievement
You maintain a balanced discussion by considering both the advantages and disadvantages of working from home versus working in an office.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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