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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area ofBritain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area ofBritain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table and pie chart provide key information about the sources and
distrbution
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distribution
 of
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police’s
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police
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 allocation in 2017 and 2018.
Overall
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, it is clear from the chart that the majority of
police
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 funding is from the national government.
In addition
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, most of
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police
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the police
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expenditures
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expenditure
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 was on
employees
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employees'
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 salaries,
while
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 the
finiest
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finest
tiniest
 proportion is on the technological aspect.
According to
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 what is shown, the
police
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 budget in 2017 overweight 2018 by 13.9 thousand
pounds
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. In 2018 the national government funded
police
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 stations by 177
millions
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million
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pounds
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,
while
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 in the previous
year
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year,
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 they received 175 million
pounds
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. In 2017 there
was
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were
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 local taxes in a total of 38
milllion
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million
,
whereas
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 in the next
year
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year,
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 it increased by 500,000
pounds
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. In terms of the way of
distrbution
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distribution
,
three quarter
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 of the financial plan in 2017 was spent on salaries,
however
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 less than a tenth was on technology. Roughly
the
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 fifth of the funds was on transportation.
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, in 2018 the majority of the expenditure was on
salries
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salaries
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 a fifth was on building and transport. Approximately 14% was spent on technology concerns.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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