The line graph below shows the percentage of households in one country using four different types of electronic systems between 1995 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates four

type

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of electronic systems which

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evaluated for households in one country from 1995 to 2015. Units are measured in percentage

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. it is

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clear

that the cell phone and the computer had

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same figures

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the start and

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the end and they reached

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consumption.

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MP3 player had not sharply improvement among

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usage. Primarily, it can be seen in 1995, the amount of usage the

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and cell

phone

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phones

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was

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started at just over zero %.

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the percentage of using mobile

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was more than

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between 1995 and 2015, they were

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the same rate in 2015, just under 100%.

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the tablet

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tablet

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had not

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before around 2004. In 2010, it had

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at the same point

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copmuter

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computer

, at 70 %. Over time,

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had steadily

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approximately over 80 %.

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, MP3 player gad

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growth among its

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customers

and reached 40 % in 2015.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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6 paragraphs

161 words

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