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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two graphs provide information about average spending with
Japanese
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 and Malaysian
families
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 in a specific period (2010) in five various categories: Housing- Transport-
Food
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- Health care- and Other
goods
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 and
services
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. The average spending in Japan
are
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is
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 illustrated in the first
chart
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,
while
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 the average spending in Malaysia
are
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is
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 illustrated in the
second
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chart
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.
Overall
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, the
proportion
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 of expenses
is
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 relatively variable in 2010 with both
Japanese
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 and Malaysian
families
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. Turning to the first
chart
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, we can observe that most of the expenses by
Japanese
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families
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 are on Other
goods
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 and
services
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 about (29%) of the
proportion
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,
whereas
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Food
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 is in
second
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 place with just almost a quarter of the
proportion
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 (24%).
According to
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 the data, Other
goods
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 and
services
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,
Food
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 and Housing are the most spending sectors among
Japanese
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families
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 with nearly three-quarters (74%).
In contrast
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, the situation is significantly disparate. By taking a closer look at the
second
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chart
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, we can observe that Housing is in first place at just above two-thirds of the
proportion
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 (34%).
However
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,
Food
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 is in
second
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 place at (23%) of the
proportion
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.
It is clear that
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 Housing,
Food
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 and Other
goods
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 and
services
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 are the most spending sectors among Malaysian
families
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 with (87%) of the
proportion
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words japanese, families, goods, services, chart, second, proportion, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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