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The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in a city from January to
June
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 2011. Three categories are available for people to request an enquiry: in person, by letter/email, and by telephone.
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, among the three options, the in-person
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 showed a constant upward growth. Telephone options fluctuated, yet
inquiries
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 via letter/email decreased and were the least option in
June
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. In-person enquiries were the least common from the start with 450.
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, they grew steadily and peaked from March to April. They remained the highest in
June
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 with 1900
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.
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, in January, telephone
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 were around 900, marking their position as the highest one.
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, the number growth fluctuated as it once went down in February, rose in March, and stagnated in April. From April, it grew again and gained 1600
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 in
June
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. Different from the other two, requests by letter/e-mail data showed a constant decreasing growth throughout the six months. From around 790
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 in January, it flew down to only half of it in
June
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, making it the least option for people to make an enquiry.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words june, inquiries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Inquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • Overall trend
  • Sharp increase
  • Gradual decline
  • Peak
  • Fluctuation
  • Outnumbered
  • Dominated
  • In-person inquiries
  • By telephone
  • By letter/email
  • Correspondence
  • Interpersonal
  • Communication method
  • Popularity
  • Comparison
  • Tourism season
  • Visitor engagement
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