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The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts provide key information about which vehicles people would prefer to go to their
work
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 with. The units are measured in percentages.
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, it is clear from the graph that the majority of people who
choosed
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 bicycles prioritise their health and fitness
as well as
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 reducing pollution.
Whereas
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, the main
factor
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of
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 using cars to go to their jobs is the comfort that cars provide.
According to
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 the data shown, in the cycling
diagram
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 it is obvious that health and fitness and the fewer pollution reasons demonstrate the highest ratios, with an equivalent
30
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%. Avoiding parking problems and the costs represent 15% and 13% respectively.
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 the lowest
factor
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 indicates an insignificant 12%. In terms of driving to
work
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 via car pie, the comfort
factor
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 was a substantial
factor
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 with a significant 40%.
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, the distance to
work
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shows
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 21%.
However
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, the speed and
to carry
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 things to
work
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 elements have similar percentages which are 14%.
To sum up
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, individuals who believe that riding a car is safer than cycling indicates a minor 11%
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, factor with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "indicates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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