Some hold the view that ideas and information should be completely open, and there should be no controls on what people can read and watch in the media (TV, newspapers, internet). Do you agree with this view, or do you think that in some circumstances governments should limit the freedom of the media?

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In
contemporary
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the contemporary

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world, with the
developing
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development

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of
techonolgy
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technology

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, nowadays, it is easy to reach all
type
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types

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of content and
information
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. A
noticiable
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noticeable

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proportion
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people
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believe that ideas and
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should be completely open,
moreover
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there should be no exhibit on
media
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. I strongly
disaagree
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disagree

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this
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with this

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idea,
due to
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the
information
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on
the
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apply

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social
media
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and other websites has
big
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a big

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impact
to
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on

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people
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’s
reaction
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reactions

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, mental health and
behaviors
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behaviours

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.
Firstly
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, some of the
informations
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information
pieces of information

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has a
curical
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crucial
critical

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impact
to
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on

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children.
For instance
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, numerous websites
contains
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contain

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a lot of dangerous content
such
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as Deepweb.
Morever
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Moreover

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,
in
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on

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this
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type of
websites
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website

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people
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can find different dangerous videos and ideas,
besides
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children have a big curiosity
to
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about

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new
unkown
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unknown

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contents
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content

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.
As a consequence
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, it
is
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has

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negative
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a negative
the negative

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impact
to
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on

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development
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the development

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of
juvenils
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juveniles
juvenile

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personality
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personalities

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,
furthermore
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,
also
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, when they learn
the
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about the

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dark side of the world it could
enject
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inject
reject
eject

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their aspect to
pesitimist
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pessimist

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perception.
Secondly
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, infinity
media
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may influence
people
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badly and normal
circumstance
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circumstances

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can become
a
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apply

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chaos. For illustrate, in Turkey, when
criticil situtaions
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critical situations

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happens
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happen

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goverment
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government

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quickly bans the
media
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, owing to prevent unwanted results. Most of the time
the
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apply

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people
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are easilly

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easilly incfluence
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easily influenced

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by
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media
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the media

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and they
are turn
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are turned
are turning

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into
aggresive
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aggressive

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attitute
to
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toward

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races and society.
Hence
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,
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goverment
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government

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trying to prevent
aggresive
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aggressive

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behaviours with
exhibit
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the exhibit
an exhibit

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to
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by

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Use synonyms

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media
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the media

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. To
sump
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sum

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up, some
people
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argued
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argue

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that ideas and
information
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should be free to reach all the
platfroms
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platforms

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,
instead
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of
no
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having no

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control. I
totaly disaagree
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totally disagree

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this
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with this

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idea, since
people
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may change their reactions to critical
circumstance
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circumstances

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,
additionaly
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additionally

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we need to protect
chidren
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children
children's

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mental health from dangerous
informations
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information
pieces of information

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Grammatical Accuracy
The essay contains minor grammatical and spelling errors, such as 'disagree' misspelled as 'disaagree', or 'crucial' spelled as 'curical'. Reviewing the essay for these simple errors can improve the quality of your writing.
Argument Development
Your argument is generally clear, but be careful to clarify terms like 'Deepweb' for readers who might not be familiar with them.
Consistency and Clarity
Ensure consistency in your argument. For example, clarify if you're specifically discussing the internet or the media as a whole, and align examples accordingly.
Structure
You were successful in presenting both an introduction and a conclusion in your essay, each clarifying your stance on media freedom.
Task Fulfillment
The essay addresses the task without significant deviation from the main points, indicating a clear understanding of the question posed.
Example Usage
Your examples, such as the reference to events in Turkey, effectively illustrate the points you are making about government intervention for social stability.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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