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Writing Samples
Band 4

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything the want online without paying . To what extent do u agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books #want
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I agree with the statement that In the future,Nobody will buy printed
newspapers
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 or
books
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 because they will be able to read and access everything on the
internet
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 without paying.I strongly agree
on
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 the idea,because the world is controlled by artificial intelligence these days and everybody has
an
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apply
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access to all
kind
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kinds
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 of
books
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 and websites
now a days
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nowadays
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. Four to five years
back
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ago
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people
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 had
less
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fewer
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 facilities and availability of internet and laptops
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its
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their
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 expense .
Now a days
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Nowadays
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 everyone has internet available on their mobile phones
therefore
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 they have access to all the news around the world.
This
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 has
lead
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 to a decrease in the selling of
newsapapers
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newspapers
.Moving forward to the
books
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,
due to
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netflix
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Netflix
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 and
youtube
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YouTube
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people
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 prefer watching movies
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then
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than
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 buying
books
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.
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 to the idea that Nobody will buy
newspapers
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 and
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books
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books,
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 there are still some
people
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 of the old and generation who still have
love
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a love
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 for
newpaper
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newspapers
newspaper
 and
books
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therefore
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 we cannot make a statement that
newspapers
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 and
books
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 will be totally
eliminiated
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eliminated
 from our society.There will be
people
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 who will still buy
newspapers
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 and
books
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. I am concluding
this
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 discussion by making a
statemnet
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statement
 yes there will be few readers that will
be
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buy
books
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 and
newsapapers
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newspapers
 and there will be a great ratio of
people
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 that will not buy
books
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 because they are available online.somebody will buy
books
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 and
newpapers
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newspapers
 and they cannot be totally eliminated from our society.
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