The chart below give information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summaries information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The chart below give information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summaries information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The bar chart gives information about how
families
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spend their weekly
income
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in
one
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country which is categorized into 8 different types of needs in 1968 and 2018. The number of
income
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is measured by percentages.
Overall
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, it can be seen that, over the whole
period
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as a whole,
families
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expenditure on food category fell significantly. Looking closely at the chart, some categories of needs experienced a sharp decrease. in 1968,
families
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spent their weekly
income
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stood at 35% from their weekly
income
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which
reaching
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reached
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a peak
at the end
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of the
period
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.
However
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, it experienced a dramatic fall to more than a fifth of their weekly
income
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. Clothing and footwear
also
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show a similar pattern,
whereas
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show a decrease trend from
one
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in ten
at
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in
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the first
period
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to
one
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in twenty
at the end
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of the
period
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. Nex, in fuel and power and personal goals,
families
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at the end
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of the
period
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not
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do not
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spend their weekly
income
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as much as they used to referring to the first
period
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.
In contrast
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, some types of needs witnessed growth
such
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as housing, transportation and leisure activities. Housing experienced almost double in 2018 reaching almost 20%. Transportation and leisure activities had a fair trend for the first time counted at less than
one
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in ten.
However
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, those two categories made up significantly more than 15% and more than 20% respectively.
Furthermore
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, the percentage of household goods remains steady at under
one
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in ten.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, however".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words families, income, one, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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