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in some countries, may people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. do you think it is positive or negative development?

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In many nations, more people prefer to live alone nowadays to become independent, in my own perspective, it has a diversity of positive and negative impacts on the
indivisual
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individual
. In
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 statement and drop in my point of view. On one hand, many people leave their hometown to live alone, to give an example, the majority of students apply for an international university and study abroad far away from home
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 of local colleges.
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 trend can enhance personal growth and they become highly independent and self-reliable
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 because they should learn how to cook, pay for utilities, rent, and do laundry, which are valuable life skills.
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, From an economic perspective, it will increase the
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 for housing,
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 it benefits the construction industry,
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 the rise in profits.
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 an economic fact from
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 university, said ( the rule of supply and
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, the more supply, the more
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).
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, one
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 household can have negative
conequences
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consequences
 on both aspects of mental health and economic situation.
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, people who live alone for a long period of time, can
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 sense of loneliness and isolation,
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 of interactions with peers from their hometown and they could lack emotional support and miss important occasions in the family, thereby, increasing the dilemma of
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. on the side of
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, the cost of living is
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preventively
 expensive nowadays, and the
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 for housing Is likely to push up property prices,
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, putting a financial burden on individuals
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mortgage
, which is impossible to cover without support from parents. In conclusion, living alone can enhance personal growth and develop life skills, controversially, it can damage mental health if a balance
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 not available between social life and living by yourself.
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task achievement
Develop your ideas more comprehensively by providing deeper analysis and more detailed examples. For instance, elaborate on the specific life skills and personal growth individuals gain from living alone, and provide clearer connections between these skills and long-term benefits.
task achievement
Ensure that you maintain a balance between the advantages and disadvantages discussed. While both perspectives are mentioned, some points may appear more developed than others, which can affect balance.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the coherence by ensuring that all sentences contribute to the paragraph’s main point, and avoid minor digressions that might disrupt the flow.
coherence cohesion
Include more linking words and phrases to clearly signpost each point, making it easier for the reader to follow your line of reasoning.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a strong framework for your argument and making your position clear.
task achievement
You successfully discuss both positive and negative impacts, bringing depth to your response, which shows good task response capabilities.
task achievement
The use of an academic source lends credibility to your argument, which enhances the essay’s task achievement.

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