The bar charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
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the primary reason for studying among different age groups, focusing on younger versus older Correct your spelling
compare
compared
students
. Younger Use synonyms
students
might Use synonyms
primarly
be Correct your spelling
primarily
pusuing
education for job chair, Correct your spelling
pursuing
pushing
whereas
older Linking Words
student
could be more interested Fix the agreement mistake
students
personal
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in personal
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chart gives information about the Change the article
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support
changes with age, suggesting that younger Use synonyms
students
may Use synonyms
recieve
more advice than older people Correct your spelling
receive
while
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students
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being
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are
students
.
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Overall
, the younger Linking Words
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students
motivation for study, and the kind of Change noun form
students'
student's
support
expected from employers, Use synonyms
otherwise
older Linking Words
students
purpose for individual Use synonyms
skill
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skills
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support
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supported
on
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in
workplace
.
Another significant group was 40-49 ages Add an article
the workplace
student's
reason for study, Fix the agreement mistake
students'
who
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whom
students
learning for equally Use synonyms
to
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apply
interest
. Regarding reasons for Fix the agreement mistake
interests
study
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studying
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a middle
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Middle Ages
carrying
by other workers than younger employers.
Examine potential societal impacts of the varying motivations and Wrong verb form
carried
support
seen Use synonyms
accross
different age groups, like implications for Correct your spelling
across
worforce
development and lifelong learning trends.Correct your spelling
workforce
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