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he chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000

he chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000
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The chart illustrates the components of GPD of two industries ( IT and
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) in the UK over the period of five years from 1992 to 2000. As a general trend, both
IT
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the IT
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 and
Service
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industry
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 showed
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significant growth during the period studied.
However
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,
IT
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the IT
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 showed the highest percentages of GPD, reaching 12% in 1998 and 17% in 2000.
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, at the beginning of 1992,
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the IT
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industry
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 recorded data of 6%,
while
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the Service
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 only showed 4%. From 1992 onwards, both industries exhibited
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an upward
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 trend.
However
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,
It
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the It
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industry
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 displayed a steady rise compared to
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service
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the service
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industry
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. IT
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’s numbers exceeded that
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 of
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the Service
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, ranging from 10% to 15%.
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, from 1998 to 2000,
IT
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the IT
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industry
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 reached its greater points, which were 12% and 17%, respectively.
While
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the service
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industry
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 saw a slight increase in the same years. Their percentages were below 8% but not far apart at 7%.
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, both companies registered an increase over the period.
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, in the next two years after 1996,
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the IT
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industry
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 showed dramatic growth
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 to
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Service
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the Service
a Service
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industry
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words service, industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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