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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
#households #income
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The provided bar chart
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a detailed comparison of United States households , highlighting key trends in household growth across income . It clearly
demonstrate
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 minor shifts from 2007 until 2015 years .
Overall
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 , it can be seen that a clear contrast between the highest figures
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observed by 33
millions
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 and
lowest
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 14
millions
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, respectively .
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 , according to the data the group with
income
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an income
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100.000
$
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significant
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 increase ,
a
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7 million households .
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 49.999$ achieved its peak in 2011 and the next year a slight decrease , 25000 $ lag behind by 1 ,5 49.999 $
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 in comparison with the above data 74.999 and 99.999 $
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stabilize
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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