Some people believe that media has too much impact over people's live, while other argued that the medium can spread information and educating people. What is your opinion?

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over information and
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has too much power over
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education
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social
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the residents of California.
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houses can telecast safety
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mankind. In my opinion,
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social
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positive
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mankind by spreading
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awareness
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Media influence
  • Public hysteria
  • Sensationalizing
  • Fear and anxiety
  • Raising awareness
  • Environmental and social issues
  • Documentaries and educational programs
  • Enhancing knowledge
  • Promote learning
  • Global connectivity
  • Media literacy
  • Critical evaluation
  • Information dissemination
  • Public service announcements
  • Emergency information
  • Consumer behavior
  • Advertising impact
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