The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides data
of
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families
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' average weekly spending in a particular nation during
years
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the years
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1968 and 2018. The
income
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provided is in percentage. Over
all
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all,
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there has been significant change by 2018 compared with 1968. leisure has
over taken
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overtaken
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food becoming the highest percentage of
income
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spent.
Household
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The household
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has the same percentage in both
the
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years which is 7% food was the category where
families
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spent most of their
income
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which is 35% but it decreased 17%percent in 2018. The other categories in 1968 never crossed 10% of the weekly
income
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.
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, categories
such
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as housing,leisure and transport increased by 7%, 5%and 15% respectively. in 2018 fuel and power, clothing and footwear and personal goods have dropped below 10%. fuel and power
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fallen by 3 % but still is the lowest category on which
the
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families
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spent
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. to summarize,
families
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spending
spenading
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spending
have changed previously most focus was on food and it has changed to leisure.
while
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fuel and power are still lowest and household goods are still same unchanged.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words families, income with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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