The graph shows the proportion of population aged 65 and over in major developed countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below predicts people aged 65 or more in the USA, Sweden, and

Japan

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from 1940 to 2040.

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, all countries indicate a growth in

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by 2040.

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, following the statistics,

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will rise drastically, becoming the largest country with seniors by the end of the period. Looking closely from 1940 to 2000, the elderly

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in the USA represented 10% and it peaked at 15% in 1980 and slightly

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14% in 2000. In

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contrast

, Sweden started with about 6% in

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population

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and drastically rose

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about 16% in 2000.

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Japan

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began with 5% and modestly decreased in 1980 with approximately 3%.

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started to gradually grow at 4% in 2000. From 2000 to 2024, the USA will keep their percentage stable (around 12%) until 2020

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22% in 2040. Sweden follows the same trend, gradually rising until 2040 with 25%

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population

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aged 65 and over. The senior

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Japan

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will drastically rocket from about 4% in 2000 and jumping to about 26% in 2024.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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population aged 65 and over
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