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Band 3.5

the plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how in looks today

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The layouts given represent the changing of several areas in
port
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 harbour between
in
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the past and today.
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, it can clearly be seen that several parts have been reconstructed to expand the
area
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, except some places have remained unchanged. In 2000, obviously, the port harbour consisted of several parts: in the north, west, south, and east
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area
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. The conspicuous
area
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 was the castle which was in the south part and on the opposite we can see a public beach with one dock which is usually for the passenger to use ferries.
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, in the
west
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area
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, the
super rich
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 could park their own private yachts beside fishing boats.
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, in the west of the land
area
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, many facilities in front of the main road
such
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rest
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a rest
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area
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 and car park.
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, nowadays, the harbour has been improved in some areas.
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, the dock
area
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 has been built to exaggerate a large
area
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 for passengers. In the south
area
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, the castle has been demolished and replaced with a swanky hotel with a private beach that was in the past could be a public space. Nearby the hotel has
been
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built cafes and shops beside lifeboats for visitors, from
then
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 onwards, it is noticeable that the
area
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 of fishing boats has been switched with private yachts. Interestingly, the
rest room
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restroom
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area
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 and parking car have been expanded.

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task achievement
Your essay discusses the key changes in the harbor layout but adding more specific details about the changes to provide a comprehensive response will enhance clarity and completeness.
coherence cohesion
Focus on organizing your ideas with clear topic sentences and logical progression to enhance coherence and cohesion.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your introduction briefly outlines the main points you will discuss in the body for a more structured response, and include a clear conclusion summing up the changes.
task achievement
Your essay demonstrates awareness of the changes over time, comparing past and present effectively.
coherence cohesion
The essay uses expressions such as "on the other hand" to show contrast effectively, aiding cohesion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multi-purpose building
  • recreational facilities
  • maritime safety
  • leisure destination
  • tourism-focused
  • infrastructure improvements
  • pedestrian promenade
  • landmark
  • expanded roads
  • transport infrastructure
  • industrial use
  • cruise ship terminal
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