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Band 7.5

A friend of yours is going on holiday and has asked you to recommend a destination. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter recommend a good place that you have visited before for a holiday say where you went and where you stayed say what you can do there and what the food was like You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Chris,

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Dear Chris How are you ? you must be on cloud nine since you have cracked the MCAT examination on the first attempt. I just got your letter yesterday and seems like you need expert advice on where to go for vacation. Well, here to help. First of all, my recommendation for the place to visit will be the Golden Temple in Amritsar, Punjab. I have been going there every year ever since I was 5, and, trust me, I felt so blissful during each visit. On top of that, you can live there absolutely for free
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 you do not have to pay even a single penny for food. So, there is an exquisite hotel called 'Guru Angad Dev Ji Residency' where you can just drop in and get a family condo but be sure to book it ahead of time as the reservations run quickly. Talking about the delicious food, I have to mention the free hotel just below that building on level 1. Do not miss their semolina pudding, you will see a buffet setting there. So, just eat as much as you want. Me and my family have always had our 3 meals at the same place. Do not forget to send me pictures. Happy Journey! With Love, Jashan

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Coherence and Cohesion
Use paragraphs to expand more on each point you make for clarity.
Task Achievement
Include more detailed information about the activities available at the destination.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have a good greeting and closing, which makes the letter feel complete.
Task Achievement
The writing tone is friendly and personal, which suits the purpose of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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