Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. What is your opinion?

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observed all around the world that the environment
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worse.
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some, global environmental problems ought to be solved internationally,
while
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others claim that it is better to do domestically. In my opinion, I agree that these
issues
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should be tackled with
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of all
countries
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. A good reason to solve the environmental
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globally is that developed
countries
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are more responsible for global warming than other
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.
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, citizens of these
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have the opportunity to afford
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not only one car and they pump out emissions which are the causes of global warming. Global warming affects all
countries
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around the world and needs a
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effort to tackle it.
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, in the 20th
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century
, there was an
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explosion
exploration
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at
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Chernobyl
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Chornobyl
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nuclear power station and not only Ukraine
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but
also
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other surrounding
contries
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countries
were affected by that.
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, all
countries
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participated in solving
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air pollution problem. Another point to consider is that developing and undeveloped
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have
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lack of professionals and tackling environmental
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is a financial burden many
countries
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cannot afford on their own.
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why developed
countries
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should
also
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be involved and help others using their professionals, technology and money.
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, some developed
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have already solved some environmental problems and they have
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knowledge
how
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of how
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to deal with
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them
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.
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,
Chinese
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the Chinese
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goverment
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government
now is trying to solve the problem
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of
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air pollution and they
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a lot of money to produce their own electric cars. It means that China can help others using their
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knowledge
and electric cars. In conclusion, one can say that all
countries
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should
patricipate
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participate
in solving global environmental problems. By doing
this
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, these
issues
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will be solved quicker and in
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effective way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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