Many major cities around the world have become too expensive for lower-income people to reside in. What problems does this cause, and how can they be solved? Z M

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The
cost
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of living in metropolitan areas is very high
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while
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living in these
cities
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cost
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more than some
people
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afford
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them
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, because of
low-income
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low income
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. So
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is a
problem
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because
cities
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with a majority of
population
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the population
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get expensive and
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cost
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the cost
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of living is very high compared with other
cities
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.But, there are
also
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many
people
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who are low-income, are not financially stable and
they
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do not have any opportunities to afford
themselves
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for
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anything.
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,
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information comes from the Metropolitan
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Government. There are a lot of citizens in London, so, as we can see, the
cost
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of living in
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area is very high and some individuals get
low-income
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low income
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from their job, so,
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why
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is a worldwide
problem
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which we have. And,
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issue can be solved.
The first step is
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Local Governments supporting
programs
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, like free education,accommodation and housing for
people
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with low income, and the second step is volunteering or helping to support these types of individuals.
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, many state and local governments have used money from the State and Local Government
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to expand the number of support services
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and create new
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to address the growing
problem
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of
low income
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people
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. In conclusion, the high
cost
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of living in metropolitan areas poses significant challenges, particularly for low-income individuals who struggle to afford basic necessities.By implementing support
programs
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such
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as free education, affordable housing, and financial assistance, local governments can help alleviate
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burden.
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,
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problem
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can
solve
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with
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solution.
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Expand on the 'volunteering or helping to support' point with more detail or examples.
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Provide more specific examples or data to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Improve transitional phrases to enhance the flow of your paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion that frame the issue and propose a solution.
task achievement
Identifies a relevant problem that affects many cities worldwide.
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